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Midnight Starflakes-Fisrt Kiss

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                We sat together on the bench, watching the snow, drift to the ground.
                “See, they’re like stars…they’re starflakes…” Lily’s voice was soft, innocent. I turned my head to her, to look at her. I knew what I was feeling. I knew, that I loved her.
                 She looked to me. Those pools of sapphire drew me into her.
                 "Lily…I—I want to…” I let my voice drag off into the silence around us. I knew what I wanted, but how could I think she would want it too? How could I ask?
                 “Yes Kerri?” My eyes looked down so I didn’t see the smile she wore, but I could hear it hinting in her voice.
                 “Lily…” I placed my hand over her’s as it rested on the bench. I rubbed her hand gently through the material of our gloves. I looked back up to her, tears almost in my eyes. I was trembling. “… I don’t know…” I closed my eyes and sighed. I couldn’t do it. Couldn’t tell her.
                 As I began to slip my hand away, I felt her turn her hand palm-skyward and wrap her fingers around mine. A moment after I felt a soft-gloved hand on my cheek.
                 I opened my eyes slowly and saw her looking at me. She smiled so sweetly, so innocently. She was truly lovely. She caressed my cheek ever so gently before she leaned in. she paused for a moment, as if to pull away, but it was too late to turn back now. I leaned in the rest of the way and our lips met. I closed my eyes as I felt her softness on my lips. A tear escaped from the corner of my eye. I had wanted this for so long, and it felt like everything I had was pouring out to her.  
                 This is what I hoped for. Waiting for this had built up so much frustration, so much desperation, and it all just left. I felt as if things would be all right. This felt right.
                  Lily pulled away slowly and rested her forehead against mine. I smiled through my tears and opened my eyes to look at her.
                  “I…I didn’t know….” My voice cracked slightly as I spoke, I didn’t know she felt the same.
                  “Neither did I…” She smiled and kissed the tip of my nose before she leaned back and rested against the bench looking to the sky. And all I could do was watch her in her beauty.
This is an excerpt from my novel that i'm working on which is entitled Midnight Starflakes. I know it's not a real word, but that's what neologism is for.. i made it up for the purpose of the book. now, this is the scene where Kerri and Lily first kiss, yes it's a lesbian story... But yeah...

I'm rather happy with this, or at least the general Idea of the scene, as always my work is subject to change, and I would enjoy to hear feed back from any and every one who is willing. please let me know what you think for this scene is rather pivotal to the whole story.
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I love this is amazing :)